tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post4303663812307607198..comments2024-03-27T13:48:27.538+00:00Comments on HyperCRYPTICal: WistfulnesshyperCRYPTICalhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-39058386393696921202012-05-04T20:04:23.543+01:002012-05-04T20:04:23.543+01:00...then again and again. emptiness of being, marke......then again and again. emptiness of being, marked with disasterous consequences of some ridiculous acquaintance. her moves so heavy. her lack of consciousness, ugliness of that moment. i hated her from the very beginning. and then, her body sitting next to mine. smiling face and how she claimed the room, my room, doing whatever she wanted, sitting however she wanted, talking whatever she wanted. how could one be so natural? shameless in own her happiness. i couldn't stand it. i couldn't. beauty was attacking me. beauty wanted to destroy me. to destroy my dead world. all I wanted to do was to shut her mouth at least once. couldn't stand all those phrases stubbornly leaving her mouth, making me watch. her lips moving, her tongue, i detested her truly. couldn't live without her noise. i dreamt of possibilities making her shut up, stuffing her head with my stiff cock replacing the thoughts she had. always thoughts. always. silly childish innocence and lack of awareness of that crushing effect on me. i have never hated anyone in my life as i hated her. her hands moving, oh god, where were you. her palms. her fingers. her scent, fresh and clean and bitter penetrating my olfactory tract as acid. i buy her favourite scents to live with them. me, who never smells, never. i have no smell. i am nothing. without her sitting next to me i'm nothing...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-16256329470719001702012-04-22T08:48:37.406+01:002012-04-22T08:48:37.406+01:00Thanks Martin and Mariya - much appreciated!
Anna...Thanks Martin and Mariya - much appreciated!<br /><br />Anna :o]hyperCRYPTICalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-24428638975270550382012-04-20T22:42:57.914+01:002012-04-20T22:42:57.914+01:00Lovely story.Lovely story.Mariya Kolevahttp://phoenix-em.com/mariyakolevanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-13662941544487006062012-04-20T20:12:03.921+01:002012-04-20T20:12:03.921+01:00That feels familiar. A beautiful piece.That feels familiar. A beautiful piece.Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17564210453026152076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-91976372294269815192012-04-19T20:57:51.137+01:002012-04-19T20:57:51.137+01:00Thank you Tracy!
Anna :o]Thank you Tracy!<br /><br />Anna :o]hyperCRYPTICalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-88493449360902580962012-04-19T13:46:25.112+01:002012-04-19T13:46:25.112+01:00Lovely poem. It is so hauntingly sad. I could feel...Lovely poem. It is so hauntingly sad. I could feel the weight of the protagonist's loss.Tracy Crenshawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10118044404594498000noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-43191038628440504152012-04-18T10:17:16.237+01:002012-04-18T10:17:16.237+01:00Thanks Madeleine - much appreciated.
Anna :o]Thanks Madeleine - much appreciated.<br /><br />Anna :o]hyperCRYPTICalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-21674164826083028092012-04-17T09:18:07.614+01:002012-04-17T09:18:07.614+01:00Wow, that was really good -- so intensely sad. We...Wow, that was really good -- so intensely sad. Well done!Madeleine Begun Kanehttp://www.madkane.com/humor_blog/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-81805733771453584682012-04-14T18:31:19.585+01:002012-04-14T18:31:19.585+01:00Thanks again for your very welcome comments folks ...Thanks again for your very welcome comments folks - I really appreciate them!<br /><br />Anna :o]hyperCRYPTICalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-35946203518617910942012-04-14T13:26:15.434+01:002012-04-14T13:26:15.434+01:00strong work. Love your opener, a real grabber -
...strong work. Love your opener, a real grabber - <br /><br />Grey day inks<br />into the blackest night,<br /><br />Anna if you're looking for somewhere to get constructive crit/honest feedback in a neutral, safe environment, you should check out the crit/discussion group I founded and co-admin - link s on my blogroll/sidebar. You'd be most welcome :)Luke Praterhttp://lukepraterswordsalad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-89906073669206348692012-04-13T16:00:17.177+01:002012-04-13T16:00:17.177+01:00Anna, I see a poet trying to move on, break a link...Anna, I see a poet trying to move on, break a link, ignore the feelings from inside. Yet drawn back by memories so sweet yet painful. I like the blend, I like the separation. I love the Poem. Cheers dear. permit me to tweet this post.Marcelohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00838827465636970509noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-50524129879381185722012-04-13T04:45:10.152+01:002012-04-13T04:45:10.152+01:00Anna, it's so ironic - I just hopped over afte...Anna, it's so ironic - I just hopped over after you comment on Billie Holiday, and here is a woman expressing that gut-deep longing that is scented with Billie's magnolia. Beautiful internal rhymes throughout. You made me melt into a puddle, and well. Peace, Amy<br />http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/04/10/my-irish-roots-long-ago-and-far-away-prose/Sharp Little Pencilhttp://sharplittlepencil.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-16035434466719322962012-04-13T01:30:50.842+01:002012-04-13T01:30:50.842+01:00Love the use of color here. Well done.Love the use of color here. Well done.De Jacksonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04798544585779003567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-53159123232588839072012-04-12T21:27:37.316+01:002012-04-12T21:27:37.316+01:00Awww... sad to lose someone in love.
I felt the h...Awww... sad to lose someone in love. <br />I felt the heart ache in this.Daydreamertoohttp://daydreamertoo.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-39365472825113727842012-04-12T13:09:03.253+01:002012-04-12T13:09:03.253+01:00brilliant :)brilliant :)Misterio Vidahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04396947981573285341noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-73918729829331823812012-04-11T17:36:46.204+01:002012-04-11T17:36:46.204+01:00Thank you for your very kind comments folks!
Anna...Thank you for your very kind comments folks!<br /><br />Anna :o]hyperCRYPTICalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-62507010790647622902012-04-11T12:29:32.226+01:002012-04-11T12:29:32.226+01:00Wonderful piece of writing! I loved it! xoXoxWonderful piece of writing! I loved it! xoXoxKayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14368539518339009833noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-58792860397980712222012-04-10T23:58:30.663+01:002012-04-10T23:58:30.663+01:00Haunting poem. Beautifully so. And the longing fee...Haunting poem. Beautifully so. And the longing feels real. A powerful write.Adura Ojohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10787703060107491771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-85375081099311499652012-04-10T16:43:27.269+01:002012-04-10T16:43:27.269+01:00you use great pictures to illustrate that feeling....you use great pictures to illustrate that feeling..my fav was the one with the pressing feet<br />into waiting slippers...that's awesome...feltClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-57642833323681294442012-04-10T16:23:41.604+01:002012-04-10T16:23:41.604+01:00Beautiful, gentle piece.Beautiful, gentle piece.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-36213710351502859992012-04-10T11:53:38.626+01:002012-04-10T11:53:38.626+01:00really nice story telling...some really nice near ...really nice story telling...some really nice near rhymes as well that pull you through....nice capture of the feel...i likeBrian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-62254434965661464912012-04-09T23:57:00.787+01:002012-04-09T23:57:00.787+01:00Melancholy and sad...there are some ghosts that ne...Melancholy and sad...there are some ghosts that never leave us ~ Nice emotional post ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-70855213250348856912012-04-09T18:19:03.539+01:002012-04-09T18:19:03.539+01:00OMG this is such a beautiful poem! So powerful and...OMG this is such a beautiful poem! So powerful and I really melted into the poet's feelings.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14722549444150266706noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-37247792221687519232012-04-09T16:01:18.899+01:002012-04-09T16:01:18.899+01:00Where do broken hearts go?Where do broken hearts go?drerhumuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06367405811401324007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-4413455431237191022012-04-09T13:32:55.582+01:002012-04-09T13:32:55.582+01:00This is a brilliant poem :) so engaging.This is a brilliant poem :) so engaging.Jack Edwards Poetryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11813177533690643652noreply@blogger.com