tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post4727422735905039043..comments2024-03-29T00:31:51.931+00:00Comments on HyperCRYPTICal: Where sea flowshyperCRYPTICalhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-67269301023388327432015-02-07T01:10:52.148+00:002015-02-07T01:10:52.148+00:00This is such a deep and very beautiful poem. I enj...This is such a deep and very beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading it very much.Beatehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14712395242968990000noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-44394066153895249282015-02-03T14:52:53.348+00:002015-02-03T14:52:53.348+00:00I felt I was walking right along the beach with yo...I felt I was walking right along the beach with you...whispering to you to take the step...keep walking forward my friend :)Anthony Stevenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17204430536174558106noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-75681030911932357222015-01-31T07:02:11.302+00:002015-01-31T07:02:11.302+00:00So good to see you back!!! I LOVE this. A true wor...So good to see you back!!! I LOVE this. A true work or art :) Optimistic Existentialisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11507986337866049924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-60205077808893765052015-01-30T23:29:02.568+00:002015-01-30T23:29:02.568+00:00Beautiful how the waves of your lines flow to the ...Beautiful how the waves of your lines flow to the reader's eyes and ears.<br /><br />Does love ever really die?Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17564210453026152076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-64577468409600662472015-01-30T16:19:09.335+00:002015-01-30T16:19:09.335+00:00Liked the hanging on of the old line into the new ...Liked the hanging on of the old line into the new line of the next stanza. Gives it a melancholy feel, IMO.Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-12586338767955727232015-01-30T15:52:11.720+00:002015-01-30T15:52:11.720+00:00I love the repetition in this and the story line k...I love the repetition in this and the story line kept my interest to the last line...thankyouGerry Snapehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07269492251928362799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-39665850573080418742015-01-30T15:30:13.078+00:002015-01-30T15:30:13.078+00:00It's a good note to return on, these waves of ...It's a good note to return on, these waves of cinquettes, each returning to the sme words as the last, and then breaking before moving on. Good to see you.Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-59238951557964945042015-01-30T14:32:49.947+00:002015-01-30T14:32:49.947+00:00That's a very clever twist on the form. Nicely...That's a very clever twist on the form. Nicely done.Miskyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10280369979543928659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-84336974081019981532015-01-30T12:20:50.444+00:002015-01-30T12:20:50.444+00:00Lovely linking, verse to verse.Lovely linking, verse to verse.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-5120504391393364002015-01-30T08:18:59.890+00:002015-01-30T08:18:59.890+00:00Absolutely beautiful, Anna. Linking the stanzas by...Absolutely beautiful, Anna. Linking the stanzas by repeating the last/first lines is a lovely poetic touch and really helps to bring the whole piece together.<br /><br />I think there's an extra could in the second line ...<br /><br />Hope the poetic flame truly catches light for you again, Anna.<br /><br />TonyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-90073142567658249012015-01-30T06:35:10.097+00:002015-01-30T06:35:10.097+00:00Welcome back, my dear, and I know exactly what you...Welcome back, my dear, and I know exactly what you mean - haven't been able to respond to prompts either. With those cascading stanzas you've built upon Tony's form - wistful, ballad-like, very melodious. And there's a 'woo-woo' rushing sound through it all, quite mournful, like the wind.Marina Sofiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15251903359649828285noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-12071853562694915622015-01-30T06:14:25.735+00:002015-01-30T06:14:25.735+00:00I too like that you have linked these, making each...I too like that you have linked these, making each a critical piece of the wholeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-78035110335846904452015-01-30T05:55:26.258+00:002015-01-30T05:55:26.258+00:00Anna, the desperation in this so enhanced by the l...Anna, the desperation in this so enhanced by the linkage anf the enternal rhymes with repetitions - the element of sea comes in through the repetitions. I'm always happy to see you at the bar.brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-67396932732882085562015-01-30T04:49:10.310+00:002015-01-30T04:49:10.310+00:00cool idea of linking these all in a chain...and he...cool idea of linking these all in a chain...and heartbreaking to see how this starts with "if she could"...but then ends with "but she can't". Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-1790246995522675152015-01-30T03:01:09.701+00:002015-01-30T03:01:09.701+00:00Nicely done..the form enhanced by your chain of ci...Nicely done..the form enhanced by your chain of cinquains with repeating lines ..Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-32473832728281511242015-01-30T02:26:50.460+00:002015-01-30T02:26:50.460+00:00Desperation and helplessness are very tangible in ...Desperation and helplessness are very tangible in your poem.Gabriellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09968615376035959259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-13356318106241604332015-01-30T02:21:27.159+00:002015-01-30T02:21:27.159+00:00I feel the yearning in this, Anna. "If she c...I feel the yearning in this, Anna. "If she could only could..." I think we all can identify on occasion. Well penned.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-47944716076144769932015-01-30T02:19:46.489+00:002015-01-30T02:19:46.489+00:00gorgeous !
fantastic linkage gorgeous !<br />fantastic linkage Sabio Lantzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12963476276106907984noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-66998340508106729282015-01-30T01:00:35.323+00:002015-01-30T01:00:35.323+00:00CAUTION: our 22-wildchild-blogOwama is a total wea...CAUTION: our 22-wildchild-blogOwama is a total wealth of bottomless sophistication, nuanced inferences, and synonymous metaphors which you most prooooo’bly won’t find anywhere. PROCEED AT YOUR OWN WISK!! <br /><br />Frankly, I wouldn't be tooo worried about what the whorizontal world thot about me, dear; I'd be much more concerned about what Jesus shall say at our General Judgment. You may not like me now, yet, I’m not out to please you. Lemme wanna gonna tella youse Who (grrr - New Joisey accent): <br /><br />Greeting, earthling. Not sure if we're on the same page if you saw what I saw. Because I was an actual NDE on the outskirts of the Great Beyond at 15 yet wasn’t allowed in, lemme share with you what I actually know Seventh-Heaven’s Big-Bang’s gonna be like for us if ya believe/accept: meet this ultra-bombastic, ex-mortal-Upstairs for the most extra-blatant, catch-22-excitotoxxins, guhroovaliciousnessly delicious, pleasure-beyond-measure, Ultra-Reality-Firepower-Addiction in the Great Beyond for a BIG-ol, kick-ass, party-hardy, robust-N-risqué, eternal-real-McCoy-warp-drive you DO NOT wanna miss the sink-your-teeth-in-the-rrrock’nNsmmmokin’-hot-deal: PLEASE KEEP HANDS/FEET INSIDE THE WIDE UNTIL WE MADE A CIRCUMFERENCE OF the OUTSTANDING, NEVER-ENDING, THRILLIONTH-RED-MARKER-POSSIBILITIES!!! Puh-leeeze meet me Upstairs. Do that for us. Cya soon, girl…-blessed holy socks, the non-perishable-zealothttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00241446130197185049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-9083561757238157342015-01-30T00:51:26.172+00:002015-01-30T00:51:26.172+00:00kind of a misty write... walking and growing and u...kind of a misty write... walking and growing and understanding... maybe not knowingWolfsrosebudhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295258422523621134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-26356661189104101712015-01-30T00:42:24.205+00:002015-01-30T00:42:24.205+00:00Beautiful flow, just the ocean. Creative, poignan...Beautiful flow, just the ocean. Creative, poignant, solemn..but romantic and wistful. The first and last lines leading into each other, one wave crashing into another coming to shore. Superb.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-61146456565510610892015-01-30T00:30:11.270+00:002015-01-30T00:30:11.270+00:00You really excelled in this one, the last lines of...You really excelled in this one, the last lines of each stanza becoming the first line of the next is very audacious, almost creating another new form. Excellent take, very imaginative, its sombre tone coming off as both romantic & existential. Glenn Buttkushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10680725814199700692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-47381735813350782782015-01-29T23:32:44.803+00:002015-01-29T23:32:44.803+00:00Wonderful - I love the repeating lines.Wonderful - I love the repeating lines.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-84499897674349185442015-01-29T23:25:08.624+00:002015-01-29T23:25:08.624+00:00nice linked maudern cinquains....i like how the fi...nice linked maudern cinquains....i like how the first and last lines roll into each other...i mush prefer the barefoot sand walks than the crashing waves tearing them apart...but sometimes things are not meant to be...no matter how much we may want it...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-60269155830467426062015-01-29T23:18:29.184+00:002015-01-29T23:18:29.184+00:00Oh my, this is superb. It grabs you from the start...Oh my, this is superb. It grabs you from the start, shakes you and throws you in the air.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com