tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post1275835772719108923..comments2024-03-27T13:48:27.538+00:00Comments on HyperCRYPTICal: Time Ticks OnhyperCRYPTICalhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-91545390296551832732013-06-02T00:58:50.611+01:002013-06-02T00:58:50.611+01:00Sounds like the reincarnation of Medusa! Love the ...Sounds like the reincarnation of Medusa! Love the line:<br />"her ugliness is in her vices"Gemma Wisemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17466540188839321484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-31520277888805301872013-05-28T12:10:03.283+01:002013-05-28T12:10:03.283+01:00Powerful writing, Anna. The short line, with a ca...Powerful writing, Anna. The short line, with a cadence matching the original, seems lullaby-and-goodnight like. First lines grown from last lines draw me to that devastatingly beautiful last stanza, my utter favorite: <br />time ticks by <br />on vultures wings <br />waiting as inanition <br />takes its toll <br />offers fare, its <br />sigh of death. <br />Empty now starved <br />of life and breath, <br />(she has gone) <br />Gone to her death! Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-88473355447978671762013-05-27T14:24:30.570+01:002013-05-27T14:24:30.570+01:00You have a big heart Anna, not many nowa-days are ...You have a big heart Anna, not many nowa-days are that pure, anymore :-(Dead mouse, stillnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-30472014640183094842013-05-27T11:24:48.785+01:002013-05-27T11:24:48.785+01:00Thank you for your kind comments on such a sad sub...Thank you for your kind comments on such a sad subject folks.<br /><br />S.E. ~ Yes I am familiar with the back story of this most moving haunting photo - for those of you who might not know please see http://iconicphotos.wordpress.com/2009/08/12/vulture-stalking-a-child/ It is worth investigating further too for further misery was to follow.<br /><br />AnnahyperCRYPTICalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-6083658315395163752013-05-27T02:30:52.077+01:002013-05-27T02:30:52.077+01:00Wonderful how you made these lines your own.Wonderful how you made these lines your own.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-1274388391954577752013-05-26T12:10:00.902+01:002013-05-26T12:10:00.902+01:00Well, Brian spoke for me. I loved your glosa, but ...Well, Brian spoke for me. I loved your glosa, but more than that - I was changed by it. This is a heartbreaking and important work, Anna.Lydiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11135393270656573516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-54670223906480767392013-05-26T06:01:35.879+01:002013-05-26T06:01:35.879+01:00Hi Anna the new prompt is up if you want to partic...Hi Anna the new prompt is up if you want to participate I would love to have you =) You can always go back and do any prompt you like so no worries if miss the time in my world time is not linear lolAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-3479451039828839512013-05-25T06:26:13.584+01:002013-05-25T06:26:13.584+01:00" time ticks by on vultures wings"
... s..." time ticks by on vultures wings"<br />... so feel this one. wonderful work on form and words, beautifully crafted.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-48021525455437804002013-05-25T03:41:32.474+01:002013-05-25T03:41:32.474+01:00completely speechless!completely speechless!RMPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04054771419356465116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-42428701675613908882013-05-25T03:26:12.113+01:002013-05-25T03:26:12.113+01:00An excellent glosa, it does justice to this heart-...An excellent glosa, it does justice to this heart-breaking photo (are you familiar with the back story of it by the way?)...<br /><br />http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.ca/2013/05/table-for-four.htmlS.E.Ingrahamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02135141369161538082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-8270664684123648912013-05-24T23:51:48.612+01:002013-05-24T23:51:48.612+01:00Oh Anna, this is so terribly sad...but an excellen...Oh Anna, this is so terribly sad...but an excellent write. I can say no more, as I'm too moved.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-72343192711570176312013-05-24T23:49:52.399+01:002013-05-24T23:49:52.399+01:00Thank you for writing this heartfelt truth-filled ...Thank you for writing this heartfelt truth-filled poem.<br /><br />Heartbreaking to see/hear of children suffering so deeply when another country has so much.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-72769298075873844242013-05-24T23:17:50.601+01:002013-05-24T23:17:50.601+01:00Heartbreaking.Heartbreaking.Helenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13447013188405986054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-81069669105542966242013-05-24T21:25:31.144+01:002013-05-24T21:25:31.144+01:00I wasn't familiar with poet, so read the origi...I wasn't familiar with poet, so read the original. And yours does a beautiful job of extending the tragedy. Your words as heart-rending as the picture.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-2047530546269017562013-05-24T20:13:27.826+01:002013-05-24T20:13:27.826+01:00May we not turn away as " time ticks by / on ...May we not turn away as " time ticks by / on vultures wings." Well done, handling such a powerful subject with tenderness.Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10858791213787473858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-16397281424801602582013-05-24T17:31:13.680+01:002013-05-24T17:31:13.680+01:00Anna, heart-breaking and a sad truth - the picture...Anna, heart-breaking and a sad truth - the picture and the words from the heart speak to me.. Lady In Readhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13791002474933656220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-26131056141879862013-05-24T15:37:56.410+01:002013-05-24T15:37:56.410+01:00Just heart rendingly brilliant!Just heart rendingly brilliant!Cressida de Novahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00169216942864690995noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-63348589550277608742013-05-24T15:37:55.760+01:002013-05-24T15:37:55.760+01:00Just heart rendingly brilliant!Just heart rendingly brilliant!Cressida de Novahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00169216942864690995noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-50973774871200751662013-05-24T15:15:40.803+01:002013-05-24T15:15:40.803+01:00So vivid an imagery, you could feel her struggle t...So vivid an imagery, you could feel her struggle to draw that last breath ... and with it, weak, exhausted, and profoundly feeble as she is, she whispers: "I never felt for you the way you feel for me, quite the opposite ...." and she goes - cos she knew, you know, she's always known, well, almost always known the poet with that flare for 'ease' decorum - you can't hide decorum ... and why the no reply/s, because she liked the decorum she never had ... that dead woman without decorum<br /><br />So painful that last breath, and she goes - still clasping tight her olive branch ... so tight, has it snapped with that agonising finale? ... she won't know now, or ever ... <br /><br />Tell me Anna - Is it pain free on the other side? ... I think I already hear you say "No, it isn't"<br /><br />Brilliant effort Anna, dead woman told me to tell you ... well doneDead mousenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-28276212706282062742013-05-24T15:14:51.113+01:002013-05-24T15:14:51.113+01:00Stands upto the pic..I have seen it as a forwarded...Stands upto the pic..I have seen it as a forwarded email and the transition from the cabeza was so smooth. Such ironies of life we tend to live with in seemingly ignorance of blissTCPChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01735466017293465064noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-36878552796871340492013-05-24T13:03:08.460+01:002013-05-24T13:03:08.460+01:00I haven't heard of this form before but your p...I haven't heard of this form before but your poem is so beautifully composed I will have to check it out. Powerful and gut-wrenching poem all the more so because your words are true.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-69275981807702604972013-05-24T12:50:25.948+01:002013-05-24T12:50:25.948+01:00Not easy to write and even less easy to read.
our ...Not easy to write and even less easy to read.<br />our world...what has it come to.<br />Well done with the form.Janine Bolléehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09857073674960699155noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-14142391489822005822013-05-24T12:20:03.366+01:002013-05-24T12:20:03.366+01:00Heart-wrenching. Impossible to forget. Great writi...Heart-wrenching. Impossible to forget. Great writing to an amazingly resilient form.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-26685316399595011762013-05-24T08:00:42.897+01:002013-05-24T08:00:42.897+01:00This brought tears to my eyes, how you weave the p...This brought tears to my eyes, how you weave the poem into this magnificent glosa...<br /><br />Tis easy to apportionate<br />blame ‘tween men of greed<br />and men of war as we<br />turn our backs – the fortunate<br /><br />And that's what we do... unfortunately... thank you for important reminder.brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-71437152758367220882013-05-24T04:56:27.219+01:002013-05-24T04:56:27.219+01:00oh anna...just looking at the pic brought tears to...oh anna...just looking at the pic brought tears to my eyes...really a heart-wrenching write - haunting like grace says is the right word.. Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.com