tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post4056526641189194181..comments2024-03-27T13:48:27.538+00:00Comments on HyperCRYPTICal: RejectionhyperCRYPTICalhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11967085628384237933noreply@blogger.comBlogger33125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-56587602087301919802013-11-23T14:39:33.066+00:002013-11-23T14:39:33.066+00:00Neither do I know what was intended by the prompt,...Neither do I know what was intended by the prompt, but you created some gems of bleeding emotion.Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17564210453026152076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-74177966621645318422013-11-17T19:19:28.469+00:002013-11-17T19:19:28.469+00:00My favorite line:
"Revenge best eaten cold, ...My favorite line:<br /><br />"Revenge best eaten cold, hell no; pray hard, there’s fire in my belly."<br /><br />I also have no patience when it comes to wanting revenge. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-11237089182831016412013-11-17T02:42:25.410+00:002013-11-17T02:42:25.410+00:00What an interesting idea. That one about no warm ...What an interesting idea. That one about no warm embrace... wow!Jenny Woolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16881781466502273314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-77223273677573803452013-11-16T14:26:04.004+00:002013-11-16T14:26:04.004+00:00The heart on the butcher-board... so vivid and tel...The heart on the butcher-board... so vivid and tells it all...brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-51178843418601354732013-11-16T12:31:12.816+00:002013-11-16T12:31:12.816+00:00The rules, you nailed em and left the reader sorti...The rules, you nailed em and left the reader sorting out their own emotions.Manzanitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06467261212623663365noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-72888603460623771952013-11-16T04:31:07.118+00:002013-11-16T04:31:07.118+00:00Woah - stunning write with the ouch factor - you d...Woah - stunning write with the ouch factor - you did well :-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-15644503686544880302013-11-16T03:42:22.056+00:002013-11-16T03:42:22.056+00:00I think they fit the form brilliantly. I can't...I think they fit the form brilliantly. I can't say which one I like best. You've obviously got the hang of this form. You tucked a tale into every line.TALONhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03205633556998220372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-69526765496866353332013-11-15T23:32:03.011+00:002013-11-15T23:32:03.011+00:00Strongly evocative I could really feel each one. Y...Strongly evocative I could really feel each one. You captured some real truths in these. Excellent!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-21680578971907550462013-11-15T21:59:26.020+00:002013-11-15T21:59:26.020+00:00One read-through and I thought they were all excel...One read-through and I thought they were all excellent. I will enjoy re-reading them to dig deeper. ~e:pAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09450346739275578678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-81542269263145818512013-11-15T21:58:15.211+00:002013-11-15T21:58:15.211+00:00First one caught me off guard. After that blood ba...First one caught me off guard. After that blood bath, I kept trying to get up, but gained no ground.<br /><br />What a STORY in a string of excellent "seventeens"...<br /><br />I know several (two female, one male) embroiled in like conditions.<br />Difficult to LET GO, and not try to run their livessteveronihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04010875412308487592noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-61000297790769258582013-11-15T21:29:23.415+00:002013-11-15T21:29:23.415+00:00I think these are wonderful, and I like the way th...I think these are wonderful, and I like the way they build into a narrative.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-53166993421299190532013-11-15T20:06:43.994+00:002013-11-15T20:06:43.994+00:00I admire your progression with these sentences. St...I admire your progression with these sentences. Strong, stunning imagery. esp. the butcher's slab. then there is the wonderful kapow of "there's fire in my belly" So much enjoyed! Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-18507819257700364922013-11-15T19:23:30.260+00:002013-11-15T19:23:30.260+00:00Wow brilliantly done...loved the emotions you weav...Wow brilliantly done...loved the emotions you weaved into each line. Would surely try American sentences some day!Aditihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07881690136782545422noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-37695519516236386662013-11-15T19:09:10.233+00:002013-11-15T19:09:10.233+00:00Painful moans of rejection and revenge..hmm..bette...Painful moans of rejection and revenge..hmm..better to empty the <br />belly of bad memories..strong emotions felt..Truedessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09079953417572207613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-20357462076650236152013-11-15T17:10:30.044+00:002013-11-15T17:10:30.044+00:00'Empty, I am yesterday; tomorrow has no need f...'Empty, I am yesterday; tomorrow has no need for warm embrace.' - my fav., good reminder to stay in now... ~ Clever writing.humbirdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00106270909713851811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-34522726436484208192013-11-15T17:01:27.197+00:002013-11-15T17:01:27.197+00:00the last two reading taking from the previous line...the last two reading taking from the previous line. lovely!! TCPChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01735466017293465064noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-6651358932317810802013-11-15T16:30:34.868+00:002013-11-15T16:30:34.868+00:00spilled emotions..
loved it..spilled emotions..<br /><br />loved it..Jyoti Mishrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01794675170127168298noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-42057788892466166632013-11-15T15:34:03.667+00:002013-11-15T15:34:03.667+00:00I love how these stand alone and combine to make a...I love how these stand alone and combine to make a breathtaking poem. I want to help you get revenge now...Heidihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02757679752138734026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-53121889117988024322013-11-15T15:17:20.286+00:002013-11-15T15:17:20.286+00:00Very palpable hurt and pain in this poem! "Be...Very palpable hurt and pain in this poem! "Belly full of you, I spill memories until I run on empty" - great line!Gabriellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09968615376035959259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-87783452735961781682013-11-15T10:13:17.173+00:002013-11-15T10:13:17.173+00:00I like how you moved the sentence endings to sent...I like how you moved the sentence endings to sentence beginnings...as you carry us through the levels of disappointment...love the first line.Kathy Reedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12326495504453579091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-76887314562706636302013-11-15T06:59:53.461+00:002013-11-15T06:59:53.461+00:00This has a very unique feel to it..This has a very unique feel to it..Ghadeerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04811397676327530873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-21998517037902400172013-11-15T04:58:35.043+00:002013-11-15T04:58:35.043+00:00oh heck...all of them heavy with emotions... very ...oh heck...all of them heavy with emotions... very nice...the one with the heart on the butchers slab...dang... tightly woven annaClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-74760651452910726362013-11-15T03:52:12.325+00:002013-11-15T03:52:12.325+00:00Excellent language - I really appreciate this prec...Excellent language - I really appreciate this precision - this is poetry crafted with a scapel getting to the nervous center of pain, hurt, and the reactions to it. Wonderfully done.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-44558034577289551012013-11-15T03:18:18.614+00:002013-11-15T03:18:18.614+00:00You have written these from the heart and from the...You have written these from the heart and from the 'gut.' Definitely strong writing!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3139696084392272622.post-71503866223645327552013-11-15T02:08:42.574+00:002013-11-15T02:08:42.574+00:00This is wonderfully written. Lots of raw emotion e...This is wonderfully written. Lots of raw emotion evident in this piece. Optimistic Existentialisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11507986337866049924noreply@blogger.com