There is a sad strange comfort here
Drowning sorrows in sweet red wine.
We raise our glass and feign good cheer,
Sad little ladies of the vine.
Sad little stories intertwine
As secret longings we confess,
Our secret pain we do consign,
Drinking to drown our loneliness.
Anna :o]
Hah, an end to writers block, thanks to Gemma Wiseman at dVerse~Poets Pub! Today is Form for All and the form is that of the Huitain. Gemma writes:
There are those who claim that the huitain is French in origin, and others who are adamant it has Spanish origins. Either way, it was popular in the 15th and early 16th centuries and was often used for epigrams in the 18th century. The form evolves around the number eight.
In France , the huitain was closely associated with the ballade which comprised three eight line stanzas, with the last line being a refrain. The ballade was set to music during the 13th-15th centuries. But the huitain dismissed the refrain element and the music.
The original huitain is a single verse, eight line poem with eight syllables per line. The rhyme scheme is:
a
b
a
b
b
c
b
c
Cheers Gemma and also to the wise man who unknowingly was the inspiration for the words of this poem.
Image: courtesy of Wikimedia Creative Commons Red Wine Glass by André Karwath aka Aka
31 comments:
Beautiful and well said. I love how you built those to middle lines with the repetition of "sad little" starting both..it gives it a central anchor and an echo of the overall theme. Really a brilliant addition to the form! First rate!!
smiles...nice...def like the emphasis ay pointed out....like the emotion you get out of the loneliness in the end too...even when they are together sharing the stories....
Glad you are back!
Ahh... glad you're back and on good form too :)
Red, red wine... You did this really well.
A very emotional write, it's amazing how alone we can be in company... you did a great job with the form!
This is just perfect. It really touched me.
strange comfort indeed...very good title and so much emotions in this...
Very pleasing huitain about drowning the sorrows.
Sad litte snatch of a life
Really good, that. Isn't it a wonderful moment when you discover you've made what you want to say fit a form you had in mind for it?
Thank you for your kind and welcome comments folks.
Dominic ~ suffering a bit of writers block lately and becoming quite apathetic about it. I had started 'the poem' a while ago, freestyle, and came up against a brick wall...
I don't really write to form, but to drag myself from my happy inertia, I thought 'I'll have a go at this' and am so glad I did.
Anna :o]
Great! Thought I was the only one who caught the writers block flu. Good to have you back. You've inspired me to study various forms of poetry, hope that will give me more material to work on.
Very well written - like a little song in a way = the ballad of the sweet red wine. I'm thinking Lambrusco. k.
PS- any port in a storm. k.
A huitain to give way to feelings of sadness and so find solace. Nice write Anna!
Hank
A very apt description I'd say! Very well written and great view on the prompt!
Yes...it is a strange comfort. Enjoyed this very much, Anna. I've found, when I'm not inspired to write, that sometimes trying a form can unhinge my creative flow.. I'm glad it helped you.
Beautiful work! I love "sad little ladies of the vine."
cool. Somewhat in a similar vein to the piece I did, but your's just comes out so, so naturally, as if created out from within a conversational type chat. Awesome job. Thanks
:) Nicely done..glad you are back :)
Thank you lovely people for your kind commets.
Anna :o]
So nicely done- and a difficult to sentiment to fit so eloquently within this form...but you managed it and then some- really like the tone in this- that hidden feeling of feigning emotion when there is an underlying sadness that the wine is trying to squash....v v good
I love this one... and am glad I don't drink in this manner. LoL We love a glass of good red wine at my house. ;)
Excellent Huitain! The oxymoronic 'sorrows in sweet' is a nice touch
Hi Anna .. what a beautiful hutain - a form I didn't know about .. always interesting to find out new things ..
The thought of sad little ladies intertwining their sad stories in the vine ... glad it's still summer!
Cheers and have a good week - Hilary
A really beautiful fulfillment of the prompt. Very moving, in its use of the form as well as content.
Forget the huitain, pass the wine!
Ok, Ok, it was good.
Now, pass the wine.
Cheers from one sad little old lady to another?
Thank you for your welcome comments folks, and Friko, well I'll leave you guessing...
Anna :o]
Oh I liked this Anna, and thank you for introducing me to yet another new form. I must admit I like the extra challenge of writing to a form and found the florette I tried this week really helped crystalise my thoughts. I'll be adding a hutain to my 'to do' list!
A sad tale, well told within the form.
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