Oh, how he feels it hears it
ticking in his chest (his heart that is)
thumping away
and how he so wants
to ooze onto the floor
likes some greasy mess (he thinks he is),
give in to it as it gnarls into him,
and all he can do is respond to ‘it’
and hammers on the door (the inside of it).
They come those willing saviours –
offer to assist - and all he can do
(in the hell of it ) is scream:
f*ck off as he hammers on the door
(the inside of it).
Sometimes
there is summer in his bones
and his voices give into this…
accept the doves
and he (and they) is at peace with this…
otherwise
there is naught but f*ck off
and he exists within the hell of it
as he hammers at the door
(the inside of it…).
Anna :o]
Brian at dVerse has us writing as the blind poet,
which is of engaging the senses other than sight. Above is my offering.
Image: courtesy of Wikimedia Commons
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19 comments:
damn.
vivid..i def feel the trapped...almost a being trapped inside yourself...weird flashback here for me...there was a metallica song when i was a teen 'one' that has a similar feel...ugh...intense piece...well played....
What a hellish environment ~ I hope that more summers will come in his bones ~
Oh, I feel this so very deeply. You have really portrayed what it is like.
the idea of being caught, trapped is very clear. a real sense of a troubled soul.
well done Anna
Enclosed and being deprived can really hurt. Wanting to break free is always the natural tendency. Great write Anna!
Hank
Anna! Your poem is absolutely terrifying. The way you used rhyme and repeated words seemed to accelerate the feeling of horror. Awesome fucking write!
Really feeling held hostage here. Well done~
always on the inside hammering for release... strong imagery
I love how vivid emotionally this was...longing to escape oneself...
Vivid and intense.
I am sure it is hell for everyone when someone feels like this, for the one suffering as well as for the witness of such scenes!
Oh yikes! This is so compelling. You put us into the mind of a schizophrenic.
oh heck..that hammering on the door... really well done on the emotion side anna..
To be inside hammering.. and it could be both a real and imaginary doors I feel... I love the break of light.. the slight pause... very captivating.
So hard for someone who cannot escape the demons that pursue him from inside. Emotional write.
powerful. and, I know that door. ~
Claustrophobic and terrible. But brilliant.
Deeply, deeply dark......and I thought all redheads were all socially timid. That's some grip he's got on him! A magnificent piece of art and verse.
That desperation, that hammering gives it that hellish effect. It powerfully comes across... being trapped like that... I know of it when the one behind the trap is you alone.
Haunting and well-penned.
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