He behemoth, obese he is,
ridiculous, an affront to us, we who with polite constraint, nibble feasts with
dainty fingers, whilst he, fat slothful fool, greedy, gorges gluttonous, fills
selfish pleasures of his round repulsive belly.
How low he is, how far beneath
us, we who scowl, sated with our smug self-satisfaction. Deserving he of our derision, failed he is,
outside the norm, he an imbecile, an embarrassment, a blight upon us, worthy of
nothing but our scorn.
Watch how he moves, fat
rippling flesh of fat lumbering fool! How
can we (in our ivory towers) do naught but smile smug self-satisfaction,
laugh out loudly, jeer and deride?
Anna :o]
Magaly at Toads has us writing
of how we think mythical monsters/imaginary beings might fare in the prejudices
and discrimation rife in our present day world.
I don’t think Behemoth would
fare very well, we would not tremble at his roar, rather he would tremble at
ours…
Also shared with the good folk at Poets United
Also shared with the good folk at Poets United
Image: Courtesy of Wikimedia Commons
Author: E. Plon
23 comments:
Well penned portrait of the Behemoth. I'm not so sure he'd be cowed though. He is after all a chaos monster.
Really excellent stuff.
I'm right with you, I don't think the Behemoth would hear many good things from the lips of our society. Let's just hope that Behemoth doesn't give two damns, and chooses to enjoy life with gusto while flaunting his awesome self.
You captured the voice of meanness so well. The contempt oozes out of the words...
My goodness this is soo fierce and powerfully penned!
You painted this character so well, it made me think of someone real. Who will be cowed by no one.
Not so made up. Great warning. It is feeding and getting stronger.
Behemoth made me smile. Living the life irregardless. I could see a lot of us losing our peace.
Much love...
An imaginative and amusing take on the prompt :-)
We have invented ten thousand ways to hide our our gluttony, fashioned how many colors of lipstick to apply to our inner behemoth -- anything to keep from betraying that image in the mirror. That's why we're so prejudiced against him! Great write.
Given the chance to slowly adapt he might survive but to be suddenly thrust into a new environment not at all. Mind you creatures of the air or water might last a bit longer coming out just to frighten us.
There was one in the Sainsbury's cafe the other day. While I daintily sipped my cappuccino he tucked into a giant-size portion of cod and chips!
They really make themselves to be abhorred. Brilliant word craft Anna! Descriptively spot on!
Hank
Your poem comments well on how shallow we are as a society...nicely done.
Jeers and derision indeed!
And you made me feel sorry for a monster, and I think that we would put him with anyone obese... maybe we would see him pulling a shopping cart at Walmart in the end....
A colorful portrayal of the judgmental society we've become.
Hahaha If this a political commentary Bravo! Other than that Bravo too!
ZQ
Yes, we are judgemental, until that Behemoth sits on one of us,
Elizabeth
Yes, how comfortable we can become in our snobbish egos. Good writing.
Your use of alliteration in this is spectacular....really plays well into the ferocity of the judgment.
An impactful piece in response to an interesting prompt ... wonderfully rendered.
..."we" can't love him for what he is... Makes me wonder if we love ourselves too much or perhaps - not at all.
And how do we know that he doesn't feel superior to us? Great piece of writing, Anna!
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