I’ve always wanted one, a gun that it is,
it’ll make me look (and feel) so hard and mean
an' all the gals, the gangsters molls
will be so keen to stride with me
as I strut along the city streets and dive into the shadiest of places.
An’ maybe if we dress up enough look tough enough
they’ll think we’re old enough to drink and so we will,
we’ll swill at it, the beer and gin an’ lap it up
an’ spill it down our fronts an’ laugh at it
an’ how we will be so admired by them not tough enough
to carry.
An’ how hard we’ll be so old men quiver at our words
an’ buy us drinks an’ lend us money just to be their
friends
an’ we’ll say okay mate friends just tonight, but you
wont get it back
as we spend spend spend on beer an’ gin an’ the fattest
of cigars.
An’ maybe we’ll get close enough an’ French kiss and
stuff
an’ I’ll stick my hand right inside your bra
an’ you’ll breathe out the softest sexiest ahh an’
will hug me tight
an’ I’ll be so made up I’ll be orgasmic.
An’ we’ll get a room an’ strip off an’ soon my naked
body next to yours
an’ we’ll do things I’ve only ever dreamt of doing so before
An’ there it was in the shop it was, the gun that is
all brilliant with its silver sheen and keen I was to
get it
an’ looked around an’ confident I wasn’t seen
I slipped it smoothly in my pocket.
But seen I was an’ screamed an’ screamed “It’s mine,
it’s mine”
as they whipped it from my jeans.
A lesson learnt perhaps as I now the mug being
photographed
an’ pissed off I am realising I didn’t steal the
friggin’
Smith an’ Western toy gun caps! Bang! Bang!
What a dreamer that I am!
(I wonder if she’ll wait for me.)
Anna :o]
Lillian at dVerse has us writing ekphrastic, which is
attaching words to an image, these images a collection of vintage mug shots
from the 1920s taken by the New South Wales Police Department which can be
found here.
I really enjoyed this exercise. Cheers Lillian!
(I do think my close needs tidying up though - so will work on it.)
12 comments:
I read this piece whilst listening to classical music, totally unplanned, but here I am completely lost in each line, vividness galore. Well done, and such a wonderful poem. Greetings!
Whoa, he's got lots of problems. The picure suits the story well. I can see some kid like that trying to start a life of crime, only to find himself in the slammer. Oh wait, that was me in the seventies, whoops...
You've captured the photo well....the bravado of the youth...gettin' the gun to look tough...talkin, dressin' for the girls. And the ending nails it! Enjoyed this very much and so glad you did the prompt! :)
Love your little guy, dreamin' of being a man. Nicely fleshed-out!
Well tol tale. Easy to judge, until one walks in "those" shoes.
Maybe one day he will bless the day that he was caught. He looks so kind and innocent but I can feel his dreams and cravings.
I have too!!! But maybe we're talking about different kinds of guns. ;)
A wonderful topic for a juvenile delinquent.
You've really captured the delinquency of this character and it is easy to see how he is tempted by crime:
'it’ll make me look (and feel) so hard and mean
an' all the gals, the gangsters molls
will be so keen to stride with me';
'they’ll think we’re old enough to drink and so we will,
we’ll swill at it, the beer and gin an’ lap it up
an’ spill it down our fronts an’ laugh at it';
'An’ how hard we’ll be so old men quiver at our words
an’ buy us drinks an’ lend us money just to be their friends';
'An’ maybe we’ll get close enough an’ French kiss and stuff
an’ I’ll stick my hand right inside your bra
an’ you’ll breathe out the softest sexiest ahh an’ will hug me tight'.
He's just a kid who wants to be loved.
Ah, the fantasies of a teenage tough guy wannabe! What a fun read.
You caught his personality perfectly, I think. I hope he got let off with a caution.
The perspective is amazing! And the imagination as same as could be of a teenager. Wonderfully done!
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