Monday, 30 January 2012

Submission

Red Spot II, Wallisy Kandinsky
Almost complete erasure,
her very essence
almost lost between the layers
he crafts with fine precision.
Complete submission,
she becomes his masterpiece,
his Dorian Gray,
absorbs his unbridled anger. 
Her blooded form
drips pigment on his palette,
becomes the red spot on his canvas,
she his unwilling lamb for slaughter.

Anna :o]

With thanks to Tess at The Mag for the inspiration and also the good folk at The Poetry Pantry at Poets United.

42 comments:

Berowne said...

Remarkably creative take on the prompt...

Cad said...

Oo... bloodthirsty fun...

Laurie Kolp said...

I've seen women fall into this trap far too many times. Once again, I'm amazed at everyone's different interpretaion of the picture.

Sagittarian said...

great,:) thanks for sharing!:)Very deep and meaningful..:)

Brian Miller said...

nice dorian grey ref...sad for her...you really make us see this...very nice take on the prompt....

anthonynorth said...

Great power to this. Oscar would like the reference.

Kat Mortensen said...

Artists do have that power of seduction.

Little Nell said...

Almost erased and almost lost but for that giveaway drop of red blood. Time will bring him to justice. A fascinating story told here.

Sue said...

Unsettling in its truth.

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Frances Garrood said...

Brilliant!

Susie Clevenger said...

Oh my...the visual in this is powerful! Great Work!

poetrydiary said...

You bring a new life to the picture - the first line sets the scene.

Lolamouse said...

Ooh, you went eerie with this. I like it. And I love the Dorian Gray reference.

Helen said...

One of my favorites this week ...

rel said...

What a cover up, He'd have gotten away with it if it weren't for that spilled drop of life.
rel

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thank you for your very welcome comments folks.

Anna :o]

Nicholas V. said...

Excellent write, Anna. It's almost like "Perfume" but with paint rather than odours...

thingy said...

Wow, a very powerful piece, Anna.

Trellissimo said...

Wonderfully imaginative interpretation of Kandinsky's image.

Isabel Doyle said...

Superb Anna, but I fear the psychoanalysts might have a field day if they read these Mags ...
best wishes Isabel

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thank you so much for your welcome comments.

Anna :o]

Tom said...

mmm, this is among the best responses i've read to this rorschach image

Carrie Burtt said...

Powerfully written....perfect for the prompt Anna! :-)

Steve Isaak said...

Love this, enjoyed it muchly. =)

Bodhirose said...

I'm so impressed with what you came up with here. Isn't it interesting to read the different perceptions.

dribblingpensioner said...

Thank you very much for subscribing to my blog and i will call back again to take another look around.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thsnk you for your kind comments folks and a pleasure dribblingpensioner.

Anna :o]

Elisabeth said...

I'm here from Isabel's blog, Written in Exile. Although I am not a poet, I am interested in the form and one day I might find courage enough to tackle some rudimentary poetry, but for now I'll stick with prose. It's good to meet you here, Anna, and to resonate with your wonderful words here. That's a powerful image on which you base them. Thanks.

Celestial Dreamz said...

a powerful and interesting take ... kudos.

Isabel Doyle said...

Hi Anna

The commenters and nastiness that Elisabeth was referring to in detailed on my 'adjunct blog', Living in Exile - there is a link across from Written ...

You are always a welcome visitor, regardless of how frequently you can. We are all pressed for time.

Isabel x

Jenny Woolf said...

A powerful and alarming poem, with vivid and uncomfortable images.

Dave King said...

You have a touch of him yourself? Such brilliance for such darkness!

kaykuala said...

Eerie call all too often happens in reality. Powerful verse!

Hank

ds said...

Whoa! A poem as startling as the painting itself. Well done.

susan m hinckley said...

hmmmm...very dark and somehow my eyes never took me there with this image, but paired with your words... well done!

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thanks for your kind comments folks.

Dave ~ re your question - I have considered this myself. We all have a dark side and I have wondered if mine is darker than most as ‘it’ often bubbles to the surface when writing poetry stuff.

However I have concluded that most of the material is derived from stories related to me in various workplaces by good folk who life has not treated to kindly.

I am certain it is in my nature to be a kind happy soul – for indeed I am – or do I just think I am?

Anna :o]

Luke Prater said...

This on Kandinsky's piece? Excellent poetic response. It feels visceral, gritty and very palpable. I appreciate that in poetry and in the discussion of/meditation on artwork. It loses foothold on firm ground all too easily

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thank you for your welcome comment Luke.

Anna :o]

Dr Erhumu said...

Great piece, was as if i was instantly transported into an artist's studio witnessing various emotions playing out.

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HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thanks for your welcome comment Dr Erhumu.

Anna :o]

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