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Life complicates
with every twist and turn,
with every secret
held close
to anxious chest.
He dismounts,
parks up,
enters the box,
wishes the light
more dimmed,
lest he be observed
by prying eyes.
No indiscretions he,
an ordinary man he
remains amazed
at her choice
of him.
No wealth,
no great intellect,
the only thing
he has to offer
is himself.
He thinks of his wife,
the ready scowl,
the nagging tongue.
God, once he did love her so,
yet familiarity
bred contempt
and rent apart
the very fabric
that made them one.
He picks up the phone,
dials,
heart flutters
lest she not respond,
she does, whispers
“I love you!”
He straddles the bike;
elation
fades to heaviness.
She will be waiting,
her diatribe of bitter words
will spill like shards of glass,
will cut him deep.
She sees him,
no lover her,
no “I love you!”
her bitter words
stab at his heart.
He picks up the knife;
blind with rage
penetrates her flesh,
muttering
“Well my love,
till death us do part!”
With thanks to Tess at The Mag for the inspiration.
Anna :o]
26 comments:
whew that took a turn i did not see coming...i guess there comes a point when you have had enough...shivers....
Wow - Anna! Where did that come from? Quite a twist!
Original, vivid, powerful...
Oh my ... I didn't see it coming ....
Like the others I was surprised. A nice weaving of the story.
indeed powerful...thanks for this
Wow, that was pretty dark.
Wow! That was very powerful. Well done!
Thank you for you kind comments folks.
Anna :o]
Severing ties, so-to-speak!
rel
That's one sure way to kill a relationship! :)
Wow... that was a very unexpected ending.
Wow! Great twist!
This is quite interesting... Love it!
JJrod'z
I enjoyed the build up and wasn't sure where the story would go. Sweet, to bittersweet, to bitter in the end.I loved the character background you expertly wove into your tale. Great story telling, Anna. Thank you for sharing.
powerful writing Anna
Whoa... Really good read, and very unexpected ending!!!
oooh, you are a bloodthirsty wench!
twisty-turny piece; well-wrought and manipulated
Chilling ending!
Thanks so much for your kind comments folks - much appreciated!
Anna :o]
Savage and visceral. This has great economy of language and a powerful impact. Loved it!
Good balance of flow/poetics and tale-telling. Enjoyed this a lot!
Thanks James and Steve for your kind comments.
Anna :o]
Oh my! Hee hee, you got me too.
-Dark Angel
Goodness gracious!! lol The end took me unprepared... That was brilliant!
Doris
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