Monday, 24 September 2012

Flying Down


Flying Down, 2006, by David Salle

On edge,
on the edge,
teetering tottering,
slowly slipping over…

I have flown,
Climbed
soared above the mountains,
shook the earth,
took from it,
bled it dry,
dried myself to shrivelled husk

Zenithal,
the only way out
is down…

I freefall, spiral,
rush headlong
down to dwell
amongst the dirt and ashes,
remains of life.

Dusk dims vision,
stifles, dampens resolve,
storm gathers,
bolts brain to introspection,
forever looking inward
I compartmentalise,
tie myself in fragile bundles
fit to fragment
at slightest touch.

Trapped, cornered,
hedged in within myself,
no way out.  

Teetering tottering
on  (the)  edge,
Sometimes despair
brings with it
nought but a desire to fly
                                                 

down....

Anna :o]


With thanks to Tess at The Mag and Brenda at The Sunday Whirl (Wordle) for their inspiration.

36 comments:

Stafford Ray said...

"I compartmentalise,
tie myself in fragile bundles,
fit to fragment
at slightest touch."
I guess we all feel a bit like that at times, but if we can fly away....

Brian Miller said...

oy, well you certainly captured the feeling...and a bit of truth as well on the end....fly on...smiles.

Dr Erhumu - twitter@drerhumu said...

Permit me to give my own interpretation - sometimes we struggle too much to get things done right and properly, whereas we should just let go and free-fall, what we fear doesn't always come to pass.

joanne said...

I loved the frenetic pace you set with all the flying and swooping....lovely verse

anthonynorth said...

Excellently powerful.

Doctor FTSE said...

Strong writing. Most enjoyable.

Tess Kincaid said...

Well done...fly high...

Jules said...

Some how this also reminds me of Icarus - flying to close to the sun, melted wax that held wings together...Hoping for a safe landing.

I'm here:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/09/sunday-whirl-75-nuts-and-bolts.html

Little Nell said...

Wonderful, I could almost feel the rising panic, but how dreadful when the onky way is down. Please fly!

Friko said...

Excellent combination of the two memes.

jabblog said...

This is spectacular. Brilliant response to the prompt.

Elizabeth said...

dizzying read, vivid and emotionally grabbing. Yes, sometimes the only response is to fly!

Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/09/23/darkening-echo/

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely done for the wordle and the Mag prompt....well done indeed and thanks for sharing

3am Wisdom said...

I love this one. Really resonated today.

Brian Whitney said...

Nicely done...

Carol Steel 5050 said...

I like the lines:
I freefall, spiral
rush headlong
down to dwell
amongst the dirt and ashes
remains of life.
There is a combination of falling and darkness that strikes a cord; a place where everyone has been at some time. You capture the swirling feeling of falling and floating and flying so well.

flaubert said...

Couldn't agree more, the only way is to fly ... Nice spiral feeling to this, Anna.

Pamela

Laurie Kolp said...

Great combo of both prompts, with a dizzy feel.

brenda w said...

Love the rushed clip feel of the piece...like I might explode. This is a strong write. Brava!

Tumblewords: said...

Flying is sometimes the only option. I love your poem.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Thank you for your kind and welcome comments folks

and we do all have our down days...

Anna :o]

ayala said...

Nice write :)

Claudia said...

oh yes...such a felt write..and good if we can fly on then...

Helena said...

Intertwined divinely!

~T~ said...

Whoa...well done.
The painting doesn't evoke many pleasant emotions, does it?
Be sure to fly up again!

Dave King said...

Well, I thought they were both difficult, but you have mined a fine poem using them both! I step back in surprise and admiration!

Jack said...

Your word choice is fantastic.

"Zenithal." I'm jealous...

Luke Prater said...

fantastic response to the words prompt! Love this

brenda w said...

I see myself in this piece, and thank you for that reflection. My week was difficult, and your last words bring some release.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Cheers for your kind comments folks - they are much appreciated.

Anna :o]

Brian Miller said...

happy saturday anna...smiles.

Linda said...

It is so creative to add a focused, personal dialogue to events happening in the painting, that seem NOT to have a clear focus. Brilliant work, Anna. I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing. =D

Bee's Blog said...

An incredible piece of writing. I know only too well those feelings you describe.

Fly lady, fly!

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Thank-you Brian, Linda and Bee.

Anna :o]

NixBlog said...

Beautiful writing! And you killed two meme-birds with one pen!

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Thanks Nick!

Anna :o]