Monday, 4 March 2013


Photo by TheFoxAndTheRaven

he wears his misery
like a too long overcoat. 

(He adores her.)

He is her plaything,
she is fickle, she doesn't care,
she will finish it tonight
and that’s for sure.

(He knows it.)

She plays her games. 
Sultry, she pouts,
twirls her finger through her hair;
whispers come to bed with me.

He does.

When it’s over she says it’s all over
and he cries.   
I don’t love you anymore she says,
wipes sad tears from his sorry eyes. 
She cleaves him to her breast
I don’t love you little puppy dog
she whispers callously.

he puts on his overcoat and leaves.

Anna :o]

Thanks to Tess at The Mag for her excellent prompt.


Rambly T said...

I loved your take on the prompt.
The power of control this lady has...he walks away with tail between his legs... :-)

Brian Miller said... last twist of the knife in his gut eh? no wonder he is jacked up....wonder how many times he will fall for that...

aka_andrea said...

ooh, felt thst one. been there a time or two.

Jyoti Mishra said...

agony, confusion but hidden hope..
but at last the final break..
all was so well expressed

JANU said...

That is cruel. Poor guy he took it in his stride, many would not.

Frances Garrood said...

I love this!

anthonynorth said...

This was excellent and edgy. Nice one.

Green Speck said...

This was unique ... loved the way you expressed it !!!

Poet Laundry said...

A tragic tale! A cycle I hope will break.

Friko said...

Ah, not nice. He should simply drop her.

Little Nell said...

Callous indeed. Seems like he was being used - role reversal? Very well done.

Wayne Pitchko said...

very nice...thanks for sharing this

Heidi said...

Wow, cool story here. She is rough!I kind of feel bad for him, but I also kind of don't. It makes me wonder what else has gone on.

Dave King said...

I think you have caught the essence (a possible essence) of the image extremely well. Congrats.

Helena said...

Cor, lives and loves can be a real bitch! Poor little guy.....♥

Tess Kincaid said...

Unexpectedly sad tale...

Sabio Lantz said...

Women are so cruel -- well, they certainly dream about it. ;-)

Anonymous said...

Anna, wow this poem is a compact
little film noir... I can imagine
Ava Gardner saying these words.

What a bummer that I haven't read this poem earlier.

LOve, the sexy energy.

Old Ollie said...

wow - like a scene from a film - vivid!

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Grateful for your welcome comments folks.

Anna :o]

Snowbrush said...

Feeling betrayed and humiliated doesn't set well.