Tuesday, 5 April 2011

One Night Stand

One Night Stand

An elaborate ritual,
You dance behind
My shower screen.

Intimately connected,
I watch
As you wash away
The memory of me.

Cleansed,
You leave,
Passing me
Without recognition.

Anna :o]

With thanks to Tess at Magpie Tales

34 comments:

Frances Garrood said...

I really like this. It says it all.

anthonynorth said...

An inevitability in the words. Excellently done.

Isabel Doyle said...

woo-hoo!!

no bitterness, clear-headed observation
great poem

LKHarris-Kolp said...

A powerful piece... great image!

~laurie

izzy said...

Too bad we sometimes wash the mood off
with the soap- Thanks!

Kit Courteney said...

Fab use of words to capture a specific feeling.

Nicely done :)

honeyhaiku said...

Wow, incredible terse! I love this!

Celestial Dreamz said...

lovely ... the whole scene in a few words ... powerful.

thingy said...

Wow. This speaks volumes. Excellent.

Tess Kincaid said...

Fabulous!! I LOVE this!

Helen said...

Washing away memories ... hard to do. Though in this instance, it was easy. Leaving behind all that pain. Beautifully written.

Margaret said...

A shower curtain! LOL I love your imagination. ... without recognition! ouch...

Jinksy said...

That's telling it like it is...sad but true.

Friko said...

Is that part of the dream?
Whatever, it's another good one.
I really like your poetry. I've said it before, I don't say that very often.

I wish I could do that.

Trellissimo said...

Very level headed approach to a potentially sad situation

120 Socks said...

You captured some very emotive in so few words. I love it.

Niamh said...

I like the way the title fills us in allowing you to keep the poem taut. A very restrained piece.

indiwriter said...

Liked the nimble leaping between 2 worlds..

Old Ollie said...

Now there is a poem.

Ann Grenier said...

An old story of the bittersweet in so few words---Great!

Thanks for visiting at my place.

DebbyMc said...

Oh! Fantastic! So much story in so few words.

Kathe W. said...

great take on the photo! Well done!!

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thank you for your kind comments folks!

I can't remember what random click clicks led me to Magpie Tales - but I am so glad they did - love this little community!

Having just finished a run of night shifts - I shall continue to read the many Magpies yet unread. Hopefully, a little more refreshed I will be able to leave comments more original than those already left while viewing the world through a fuzzy brain.

Friko: Not a dream dear friend - never stay asleep long enough to reach the point where I may be rejected! Damn!

Thingy: I just love your name, things and thingy being very regular visitors to my vocabulary!

Anna :o]

Hold my hand: a social worker's blog said...

Nice...very nice :-))

Doris

earlybird said...

Very good. Sums it up perfectly.

susan m hinckley said...

lovely in its sadness -- a sigh of a poem

versebender said...

This evokes a sadness for sure. The art of thing is how beautifully and succinctly the stage is set and the mood created. Very well done! Vb

Marinela said...

Nice so beautifully done!

Short Poems

Jingle said...

extraordinary...

Thanks.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thanks again for your kind comments folks. Much appreciated!

Anna :o]

Stafford Ray said...

Ouch! Brilliant!

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thanks Stafford!

Anna :o]

Bee's Blog said...

The reality of some peoples' lives so amazingly put into words. Love it, sad though it is.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thanks Bee!

Anna :o]