One Night Stand
An elaborate ritual,
You dance behind
My shower screen.
Intimately connected,
I watch
As you wash away
The memory of me.
Cleansed,
You leave,
Passing me
Without recognition.
Anna :o]
With thanks to Tess at Magpie Tales
34 comments:
I really like this. It says it all.
An inevitability in the words. Excellently done.
woo-hoo!!
no bitterness, clear-headed observation
great poem
A powerful piece... great image!
~laurie
Too bad we sometimes wash the mood off
with the soap- Thanks!
Fab use of words to capture a specific feeling.
Nicely done :)
Wow, incredible terse! I love this!
lovely ... the whole scene in a few words ... powerful.
Wow. This speaks volumes. Excellent.
Fabulous!! I LOVE this!
Washing away memories ... hard to do. Though in this instance, it was easy. Leaving behind all that pain. Beautifully written.
A shower curtain! LOL I love your imagination. ... without recognition! ouch...
That's telling it like it is...sad but true.
Is that part of the dream?
Whatever, it's another good one.
I really like your poetry. I've said it before, I don't say that very often.
I wish I could do that.
Very level headed approach to a potentially sad situation
You captured some very emotive in so few words. I love it.
I like the way the title fills us in allowing you to keep the poem taut. A very restrained piece.
Liked the nimble leaping between 2 worlds..
Now there is a poem.
An old story of the bittersweet in so few words---Great!
Thanks for visiting at my place.
Oh! Fantastic! So much story in so few words.
great take on the photo! Well done!!
Thank you for your kind comments folks!
I can't remember what random click clicks led me to Magpie Tales - but I am so glad they did - love this little community!
Having just finished a run of night shifts - I shall continue to read the many Magpies yet unread. Hopefully, a little more refreshed I will be able to leave comments more original than those already left while viewing the world through a fuzzy brain.
Friko: Not a dream dear friend - never stay asleep long enough to reach the point where I may be rejected! Damn!
Thingy: I just love your name, things and thingy being very regular visitors to my vocabulary!
Anna :o]
Nice...very nice :-))
Doris
Very good. Sums it up perfectly.
lovely in its sadness -- a sigh of a poem
This evokes a sadness for sure. The art of thing is how beautifully and succinctly the stage is set and the mood created. Very well done! Vb
Nice so beautifully done!
Short Poems
extraordinary...
Thanks.
Thanks again for your kind comments folks. Much appreciated!
Anna :o]
Ouch! Brilliant!
Thanks Stafford!
Anna :o]
The reality of some peoples' lives so amazingly put into words. Love it, sad though it is.
Thanks Bee!
Anna :o]
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