Night sounds
Invade my solitude
And whip up wild imaginings.
No friendly chirp
Of cricket here
Or flirtatious croak
Of frog
But war drums
Of my beating heart
And panic supersedes
Rational thought...
Where are you?
With thanks to Tess at Magpie Tales and the good folk at the The Poetry Pantry at Poets United.
Anna :o]
Anna :o]
37 comments:
You've captured the city in this.
Nice! Great depiction of the prompt! Loves it! :)
I sense the panic and worry from the first lines, and the tension grows to the final "where are you?"
Anyone ever missing anyone will relate.
I love this wording: "And whip up wild imaginings"
Being alone and in the dark can sometimes bring imaginings to the surface. Nicely done.
great imagery.. evocative writing
NICE DONE
Thanks for sharing.
Anna,
Yes, where is he? Great take on the pic. The city is menacingly dangerous and the beating heart is our nearest companion.
Hank
Besides what others have said, I love the contrast with the country.
Awesome write.
"war drums
Of my beating heart"
Love that. The ending is perfect.
"No friendly chirp"...seems that way at times...you caught the lonliness, the search, very well..
Thank you for your kind comments folks.
Anna :o]
the sounds of the city are vatly different than the country for sure...i still find them sweet music to my ears...
Living in this urban jungle could makes anyone's heart beat faster in fear and loneliness.
Your lines are poignant and good.
Such a forlorn feel to this. A wonderful write.
That was a clever take on towering image...
i like the flirtatious croak sandwiched between the cricket and the frog
days of cohan
Wonderful Anna.
Thanks for visited my site.
All bless
Ooh nice one! I like the fact that the piece is dark but is not overcome by it. 'Where are you?' That's a question I would like an answer to.
Anna,
Ah yes, I remember that feeling well: I, a country boy, went to the State capital at age 17 to join the military and spent the night alone in a seedy hotel downtown!!
rel
The city can be such an inimical place and the photo certainly is one that underlines the threatening, unfriendly aspects of it.
Nice take on this Magpie, Anna.
Love this Anna....can feel the loneliness in your words.
Yes, the city sounds are definitely different from country. I'm in the middle (close to Big Thicket in med-sized town).
War drums,indeed!
This is certainly true of the City! (I live in it and when you hear noises they are generally unwelcome, worse when alone.) K
Thanks for your welcome comments folks.
Big cities can indeed be lonely unfriendly places and the isolation this brings is at times a frightening thing.
Anna :o]
I like the use of the "O,O,O,os", as if you were calling out in desperation. Very nice.
Thank you for your visit and comment.
Hello.
This reminds me of how I felt when I first came to the US & lived in New York. Everything & everyone appeared scary.
Nicely done!
Thanks for sharing.
Take me Under Your Special Wings
The night and it's sounds can bring about all kinds of imaginings. Nicely written.
This is so deep in sense of emotion. I love the way you penned every words.:) Thanks for sharing! :) Likewise for dropping by with my blog! I appreciate it so much, thanks a lot Ana:) *smile*
Thanks Kat, Andy and Sagittarian!
Anna :o]
Oops! Thank you too Renee!
Anna :o]
Good emotions :)I like it
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Thanks Timon!
Anna :o]
Emotionally intense and well done!
And thanks for your fun submission to last week's Limerick-Off!
Thanks Madeline and I shall 'do' the limericks again!
Anna :o]
I am so glad I popped over to read your blog. Thank you..this is a great poem one I can relate too.
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