Night chills
sun-sweltered day
as
He nibbles at her, softens her.
[Her back arches at the want of him]
Elsewhere, he [the cuckold]
explodes within without;
rage heightens senses hammers fists.
owl hoots, waits til
[He hears soft click of closing door]
sensing prey
he swoops...
Upon her then he is;
scoops her up twixt threat and thunder,
throat becomes a place to hold her,
hold her til her breath is done.
[Adoration/animus]
Anna :o]
Shared with the good folk at dVerse OLN, hosted by Abhra. Cheers Abhra!
Also entered at Poets United - thanks folks.
Also entered at Poets United - thanks folks.
Image: Courtesy of Wikimedia Commons
Author: Gert Germeraad
31 comments:
Oh Anna this really chills.. the affair and the consequences.. there are always reasons but I just wish it wouldn't have to be that way.. intriguing form you have used.
Wow, a whole crime novella within a few powerful Noir verses; FLIGHT OF THE CUCKOLD might be another title option. The piece is dark & delicious. As a literary unfaithful bitch, she got what she deserved; but as a literal motif, the prospect abhors & frightens me, for the scenario is acted out too often on the nightly news.
This is the stuff of nightmare, Anna. I can sense his rage, which seems to take her MUCH by surprise.
Romantic love is an illusion. Most of us discover this truth at the end of a love affair or else when the sweet emotions of love lead us into marriage and then turn down their flames.
~Thomas Moore
Powerful words.
I can fell the threat! Well done!
Oh, this is scary, Anna. But very well written.
Chillingly achieved Anna - very sharp and fresh writing...
Sure is a nasty thing to do to a lady. Gets to be frightful given such situations.
Hank
Holy cow, Anna! What a cool story, and scary! I really like the look of this one as well, sort of emphasizes that storytelling. Elk written, sweet Anna!
A very intense piece....a complete story, chilling and thrilling, in so few words. Very well written!
Oh so dark! You really draw the reader along in this, and the mixture of bold and light, and italics and non-italicized really adds to the tension
Oh, Anna. This is so powerful. "scoops her up twixt threat and thunder,
throat becomes a place to hold her" Wow
Those last lines Wow. The optimist in me wanted this to be sexual asphyxiation over simple asphyxiation (as if that were something simple!). This whole thing is taunt with well strung emotion. You feel -snap!
oh my goodness.. i didn't see that coming... tough... an affair can destroy in many ways - ugh
Wow Anna - in short there is an intense affair - smiles. Adore your piece. Sorry took some time to visit you.
I'd say wow too. What an introduction to your blog... Though this piece could also be read metaphorically :-)
Oops..! Palpable horror :o
Yikes! Well written and creatively scary.
ZQ
Yikes at the ending Anna ~ The style is unique with the verses seemingly in contrast~
Thanks for also joining us at Poetry Pantry, Anna!
A dark tale of love affairs gone wrong....
Some nightmares are created and controlled by individuals. Consequence has a price.
wow! amazing write! love the style!
♥
Damn! Some awe full revenge and sacrifice is going on here. I'm afraid the female figure is the worse for wear--Grand Guignol at its finest.
Tight writing! You wove together an excellent piece.
Wow, the end of this was unexpected to me. Well written.
That last line is chilling - a truly marvellous poem
Oh harsh.
Oh, feel the pain...ouch,,,hard to read really....hurt :( ~ breathe deeply xx
When I began reading I fought at first it was HER catching HIM in an affair. The poem was interesting and also pretty dark. It struck me particularly because my friend was recently killed by her husband though I do not believe it was a crime of passion as in your poem. This is why we write, Anna, to evoke emotion, idea, et al. It's also why we read.
Ohh ... very frightening.
And I am surprised how you unfolded the scene so vividly in so less words ... hats off to you :-)
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