Oddly,
if searching for a
(possible) familial adverse reaction
it would have been an
incidental find – a saving find.
But why, as
*“When you hear hoof beats, think of horses not
zebras.”
So horses it is as
the zebra runs wild.
(The mind still has it…)
(Somewhere a
butterfly flutters – an advent of the storm.)
(There is madness
here:
Please inscribe on my
gravestone
I told you so; I really did
tell you so!)
Zebra grazes fat on
the grass.
(I tell Eddy what the
food tastes like as he tells me what it looks like.)
Eddy is dead now, yet
I still live (unaware of the chaos to come.)
(The mind still has
it…)
Anna :o]
Bjorn at Real Toads has us
writing of order in chaos and above is my offering. It is a true story.
*"When you hear hoof beats, think of horses not zebras."
Also shared with the good folks at Poets United - cheers Mary!
Also shared with the good folks at Poets United - cheers Mary!
Image: Courtesy of Wikimedia Commons
(Please note that
image is not correct to the diagnosis and is not about me, rather someone I love.)
21 comments:
Butterflies and chaos here ... and dark clouds. This reader found the way in difficult & fraught. Stay with it.
I am struck by the fractured thoughts one has with this sort of event. You created that fracture, that chaos perfectly.
This is a very interesting poem, with the horses and zebras and the interspersed dialogue. Quite wonderful to read, Anna.
I can relate to these rather fractured thoughts, HyperCRYTICAL ... Number 1.) ... When learning stick shift driving and my best friend telling me to JUST PASS, GIRL, DAMNIT, JUST PASS THIS DAMN CAR ... Number 2.) Same friend telling me: SLOW DOWN NOW, GIRL OR U WANT YOUR GODDAMN GRAVE STONE TO READ: BUT SHE WAS RIGHT? ... Any which way, awesome read, maybe new friend ... Love, cat.
What a great quote to use - the title giving us the answer, the word you cannot really say, the cause of cancer is like butterfly, the advent of storm, love the way you layered the text,
Zebras and chaos theory - what a wonderful combination, Anna!I love the way the poem starts with 'Oddly' and the lines:
'But why, as
*“When you hear hoof beats, think of horses not zebras.”
So horses it is as the zebra runs wild.'
This is so poignant and heartbreaking:
'Eddy is dead now, yet I still live (unaware of the chaos to come.)'
I know that feeling.
This is so beautifully haunting..!
A broken mirror of a poem. Hard to stare into because of the truth evident. Magnificent writing.
Somehow chaotic and unsettling to read ... but I LIKE zebras!
Beautifully done. I've been a zebra for years; it's not at all pleasant.
I think the zebras are always hiding behind the horses, snickering.
I really enjoyed it, although it was disconcerting. It was fractured and felt like how fractured things are when they are unexpected and cannot be put back together.
Always good when 'the mind still has it.' Then there is hope.
Had to re-read and found it profound...
ZQ
This was intriguing. Blessed day my friend!
What an interestingly crafted poem...layers using a wonderful quote!
An intriguing 'take' on the prompt of 'chaos' - more so for its basis in reality.
horses not zebras.. what a fascinating line of thought. Intriguing.
Very interesting read
much love...
I enjoyed your take!
I'm not really sure I understand all of this, but you've got me thinking about the way our brains respond to stimuli such as sound – and getting the reader thinking must be a good result.
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