Sunday, 18 September 2011

Beguiled


'The Snake Charmer'  Henri Rousseau, 1907

Ah this Eden,
This dark Eden,
The very garden
Where I beguile
Those that slither
Belly down.

Transfixed are you,
My haunting melodies
Resonate
And excite your mind. 
Snake-charmed,
Beguiled
You let me in. 
Dark thoughts accessible
I know
The very inch of you,
Know your mark
And sweet eyed
I bend you to my will.

Slither my friend,
Slither to me. 
My guise is that of
Melodious charm,
You see not
My evil treachery.  
Slither to me my friend,
Slither to me.

Anna :o]

With thanks to Tess at Mapie Tales for the inspiration

29 comments:

120 Socks said...

Great one Anna 'My guise is that of
Melodious charm,' - brilliant line:)

laurie kolp said...

Very tempting indeed... I especially like the first stanza.

The Cello Strings said...

love the longings and confidence in your words.

well done magpie.

Tess Kincaid said...

Earthy and delicious..."slither to me"...oh!

Susie Clevenger said...

I especially like the last stanza...like this poem a lot!

Stafford Ray said...

'Slither to me' indeed! A dark Eden indeed.

christopher said...

Uh oh. If I were slithering around I would slither the other way pdq. Ulysses tied himself to the mast and stoppered up the ears of his crew with wax when crossing within earshot of the Sirens. He nearly didn't make it past them anyway.

thingy said...

Ooh, it's hypnotic. Well done. : )

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

Very well done...

JJrod'z

Isabel Doyle said...

Biblical!

Irish Gumbo said...

"Slither to me" gives it an earthy punch, very sensual, and a bit foreboding. I like it!

Erratic Thoughts said...

Oh it is alluring, especially "I bend you to my will" line...
Nice magpie :)

Helen said...

There was so much rhythm and flow ... I was ready to slither myself.

Sean Vessey said...

so beauty is the beast... "slither to me"
thanks for making me think and smile.

Brian Miller said...

yikes...this is a little haunting anna...bent we come...

Friko said...

Trust you to come so very close to the original. Haunting, threatening yet mesmerising.

hedgewitch said...

I'm imagining a politician--but I admit, they would more likely be the slitherers, not the slitherees.

The Bug said...

Well now I'm keeping an eye out for that charming deceiver that might be lurking just around the corner. Great poem!

Tumblewords: said...

'I know the very inch of you' - I like the power embedded there.

Kay L. Davies said...

A perfect description of a snake charmer. Henri Rousseau would have like this. I like it, too.
— K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

kaykuala said...

Anna,
Be a little wary of this character. We never know his next move!

Very good build up in your verse

Hank

Anna :o] said...

Thanks for your kind comments folks.

Beauty is indeed often the beast!

Anna :o]

Doctor FTSE said...

Great poem, and a cool interpretation of the picture.

Lolamouse said...

Turning the tables are we? I like this very much!

Lyn said...

Love "the guise of melodious charm"...a disguise, indeed..mysterious words...

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thank you for your kind comments folks.

Anna :o]

Reka Sang said...

Beautifully tempting when set to music. Lovely piece.

Bee's Blog said...

Am in total of this fascinating read. At the same time, I'm chilled because I loathe snakes and I have goose bumps all over - I kid you not!

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Thank you for you kind comments Reka and Bee.

Sorry I gave you goose bumps Bee!

Anna :o]